Week 3 Blog Reviews---

Ricky Kriebel

8/31 Your posting is an appropriate length, not too short or too long to read. In paragraph 2, “I think these things…”  and “Our minds develop them…” could be more descript if you actually use the words to describe “things” and “them”. I think you are still on “thoughts” but I am unsure. In the last paragraph, I really like the supportive detail of using the typewriter-computer example and the wheel example to fully explain the concept of “idea”. Your posting could be stronger if you used an example that is tangible for thought and idea in the beginning paragraph, like you did in the last paragraph. The order chosen to use the words “idea” and “thought” were not consistent for me to follow. It seemed idea was talked about, then thought, then back to idea, which hindered the flow.

9/2 In paragraph 1, you opened with Minsky’s view and then in paragraph 2, you have a strong opinion and supportive evidence about why you agree with Minsky and his theory. You may want to look out for agreement of nouns and verbs in a couple sentences “A human can look up how to do it themselves” and “human can figure it out by themselves“ in paragraph 2 or possibly make the compound sentence into 2 single sentences to help with the flow.

Sandra Barocio – no posts for 8/31 or 9/2

Amara Villa-Rodriguez

8/31 Your use of quotes to support your ideas flows smoothly in your posting about consciousness. The leading question at the end of your first paragraph is attention getting for the reader “The problem is, what does this physical response mean to our subjective thought?”  I like the way you formatted the posting, it makes it easy to read. I did not find any grammar/spelling errors.

9/2 Your posting is concise and to the point. I like how you start with Minsky’s view and support it. And then you end with your own opinion. The last paragraph was a nice summary of why machines do not compare to humans. The only sentence I felt was awkward to read was in paragraph 3 “I believe that machines do comprise of certain heightened aspects of consciousness,…” I am wondering if are comprised is what you were meaning?