The Changing Face of Family
Hello Mary! What an interesting perspective you lend, relating economic gain to family structure. You have a great idea that could have been expanded on and possibly tied in the technology side. You started out with a thought provoking question: “I wonder if this would have been the case back in the 1920's??” The quote you used from the reading was also a strong supporter of your idea. Be sure to write more in the future so you can get full credit for your writing. The syllabus states that the requirement is a minimum of three long paragraphs. I look forward to more of your writing.
Week 6 Movie
9 to 5 (1980) – What a great movie to pick! Dolly Parton, Jane Fonda and Lily Tomlin were a great “Wild Women” cast to write about. Keep in mind the internet is a great resource to help remember details like cast member names- details like names and facts could have made your writing stronger for this piece. There were definitely troubling, or inspiring, societal ideals
that are perpetuated by the filmmakers’ use of the characters : sexual harassment, stereotypical work hierarchy which finally leads to empowerment and change. I would love to see you go deeper and write more. You have great ideas, go with them.
Jessica Chee
Directed Freewrite-Emergence
Hello Jessica! Your blog is easy to read. The first paragraph is strong way to summarize D’Emilio’s essay and tie it into your thesis. Paragraph 3 had a great transition question : But what does this have to do with gay and lesbian emergence? Because that is exactly what I was thinking right then and there while reading your blog. You seemed to have thought out your statements, they are descriptive and include many examples. I enjoyed your presumptions relating family life to technology. Your last paragraph tied your writing back to the beginning regarding identities and why they are emerging. Grammatically: One spelling item-line 5-patterns; Business meeting(s) in paragraph 4.
Week 6 Movie
Sorry you were sick! I appreciate the blog note.
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