Darien
After reading all of your blog posts I get a clear sense of your style of writing. You have an objective tone and style of writing that is organized in a logical and thoughtful way. Even when you are asked for a subjective viewpoint it is incorporated into your writing eloquently. You have a distinct way for taking what you have read, informing your reader about the subject at hand but you still hold onto your own voice. Your writing never sounds as if you are just regurgitating back facts. Your conclusions always tie back to your thesis or main pint and are summarized intelligently.
The only element that you could incorporate into your work more, would be to cite specific text to add support to your great ideas. I would also recommend editing your blogsite format so that the text is in a wider column. Since the final paper is going to be posted with pictures, I think it would benefit your paper, be more aesthetically pleasing, and easier to read if it were wider.
I found the next 3 blogs to be your greatest hits!
China’s Varying Influence 10/28/10 : You took a subject of immigration not as popular, the Chinese, but still tied in current events that are in the forefront of the immigration controversy, Hispanic and Mexican immigration. This topic could easily be developed into an expository essay, especially as it seems you did research just for this blog post.
Materialism: A Meaning Response 10/26/10: this piece is also great. I love the way you took another discipline, anthropology, and supported the concept of materialism. You did a great job of referencing Twitchell from the reading to add additional support. I also like how you wrote about the positives and negatives of materialism, and how these encompass our daily lives.
Popular Music 10/21/10: This one is my favorite. I enjoyed the reading about how our favorite past times, listening to music, can even be dictated by money. This would be an entertaining and interesting piece to develop about record companies and the music that is produced for the masses and who is left out of this monetary loop of sorts.
You have put a lot of thought and research into your writing. I look forward to reading your final paper.
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