Hilary Cummings
View of the Continuum 11/2/2010
Wow! I really enjoyed reading your viewpoint. You explained the Libertarianism in an unbiased way in the first paragraph, but you did not label it as the type of government you were explaining. Your opinion comes across strong. The conclusion was a good summary of your opinion. Be sure to include some supporting evidence from the reading to further strengthen your writing.
For Those Who Work in Finance... 11/4/2010
I found the Peterson and Chance reading to be the most difficult so far.
You were able to give a concise summary and definition of finance and the individuals who work in this field. To add support to your writing, you may have also added some direct support from the reading in the form of a citation. Grammatically speaking I only found this sentence, it may be re-worded to reflect your thought about the importance of computers in finance more clearly, it seems chopped up: Even with the invention of a computer originally, plus all of the applicable software, has taken finance to much higher levels than ever before. Overall, a great job with this subject matter!
Katie Kosturik
Cypherpunks 11/2/2010
I enjoyed your use of ‘spectrum’ in paragraph 2, to illustrate the extremes of libertarianism and the example of Parekh supported this view. Also in paragraph 2: These “cypherpunks” embrace cryptography and are using it as tool to reform against our big government today. I am thinking maybe you meant to rebel against government because they do not want to be told what to do. Great transition into the last paragraph! : So much for the buildup, but I’d like to choose a stance on the spectrum that falls somewhere in the middle. This could be a great piece to develop further especially since you brought up so many thought provoking questions at the end.
Directed Freewrite p. 455- 11/4/2010
I personally found the Peterson and Chance reading to be the most difficult so far. Discussing money and what it means to our society is a thoughtful introduction and flows nicely into the subject of finance. You pinpointed the history of finance and setting up why this discipline came about. Your conclusion was strong, although you could have added a few more sentences to make the ending paragraph as strong as your first. Possibly include some supporting evidence from the reading. It seemed short, although it had meaning. Great job with this piece.
In paragraph 2: scientist (add an ‘s’) of finance
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